写作专项训练---安慰信

【知识点】

安慰信的文体结构，思路训练，写作注意事项及实战演练

【高考考向】

高考书面表达的重点考察文体是书信。经常考的题型有邀请信、建议信、口头通知、申请信、投诉信、安慰信和道歉信。

【高考真题】

（2014年安徽卷）

为了帮助中学生健康成长，某中学英文报开辟了“HEART-TO-HEART”专栏。假设你是该栏目的编辑Jamie，收到一封署名为Worried的求助信。信中该同学向你诉说了自己的困扰：近日容易发脾气，使正常的学习和生活受到了影响。请用英文给该同学写一封回信。

内容要点如下：

1．表示理解并给予安慰；

2．提出建议并说明理由。

注意：

1．词数120左右；

2．信中不能出现与本人相关的信息；

3．信的开头与结尾已为你拟好，不计入总词数。

参考词汇：temper n. 脾气，情绪

Hi Worried,

I’m sorry to know that you’re having such a hard time at the moment. __________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________

Yours,

Jamie

Possible version:

Hi Worried，

I’m sorry to know that you’re having such a bad time at the moment. The truth is that everyone will have one of those periods when things seem to be going wrong, so you don’t have to worry so much. The important thing is to learn to control your temper so that you may not do or say anything you’ll regret. Here are three useful tips.

First, talk to someone you trust about how you feel. This is a good way of letting your anger out without hurting others or yourself. Second, go outdoors and play team games with your friends as physical exercise is an effective way to get rid of anger. And third, remain optimistic about your future. Such a positive attitude towards life can be helpful in lifting your spirits.

I hope you’ll soon feel calmer and carry on as normal.

Yours,

Jamie

安慰信

1．慰问信的基本结构

慰问信是向不幸者、愁苦者、生病者、失败者等表示安慰、同情和鼓励的信件。这类信要写得感情真诚，措辞贴切。要围绕一个中心，鼓励对方并让其从中得到安慰和鼓舞。

写信时常包括：对不幸事件表示同情和安慰→给予建议帮助，鼓励其努力→再次表示同情（鼓励）并寄予美好希望。

一、开头句型

1.  I was (awfully) sorry to hear that + 句子 (your team lost the game.)

2.  I was shocked to hear of + sth. (your failure in the exam.)

3.  I’m writing to tell you how sorry I am to hear about sth. (your loss …)

4.  Knowing your situation, I feel terribly sorry about sth.…

二.、中间段句型

1. I quiet understand how you feel now，but ... 我特别能理解你现在的感觉，但...

2. You have devoted yourself to ...  你在...方面付出了大量的精力和时间

3. But as we all know, it is extremely difficult to do ... 但是众所周知，做...本身就极其困难

4. To prepare ... , you have made every effort. 为了准备这次... ,你已经尽了最大努力

5. It’s not your fault to do ...   .....不是你的错

三、结尾句型

1.  If there is anything you need me to do, don’t hesitate to let me know.

2.  If I can do anything for you, do let me know.

3.  Remember, we won’t be far away if you need any help!

4.  I hope you can find my encouragement helpful. Best wishes.

【学生学情分析】

在写过绵阳二诊作文之后，学生暴露出了一些问题，但对如何合理表达安慰，还有很多问题，故再做进一步讲解，让学生能紧扣要点，合理得体地完成安慰信内容的表达。

【建议变式练习】

（1）

假如你是李华，你的美国笔友Mike来信说他现在心情很不好，因为在上周结束的校篮球比赛中，他所在的班级篮球队以一分之差输了。请你写一封信安慰他。

Dear Mike,

I was very sorry to hear that your team lost the basketball match last weekend. It’s understandable for you to be in a bad mood. However, if you can adopt different perspectives, the loss may be a blessing.

First, it’s normal to lose in a basketball match, for you can either win or lose. If you’ve tried your best, why not lift your spirits to face up to（直面）the result? Anyway, the essence of competition lies not in victory but in participation. Besides, you can also benefit from your loss by figuring out your strengths and weaknesses. Therefore, if your team endeavors(尽力) to overcome the disadvantages, you will win sooner or later.

I hope you can find my encouragement helpful. Best wishes.

Yours,

Li Hua

（2）

假定你是李华，从报纸上得知你的美国笔友James的家乡遭遇了飓风。请你用英语给他写一封电子邮件，给予关心和安慰。

注意：

1. 词数100左右（开头和结尾已给出，但不计入总词数）；

2. 可以适当增加细节，以使行文连贯。

Dear James,

__________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________

Yours sincerely,

Li Hua

慰问信的正文通常分为三部分：

第一部分：引入话题（同情对方遭遇，表明写信目的）；

第二部分：表示慰问（向对方的处境表示理解、关心，并给予鼓励或者提供帮助等）；

第三部分：总结全文（希望可以提供帮助）。

Dear James,

I was greatly shocked to learn that a hurricane took place in your hometown from today’s newspaper. I am writing to extend my deepest sympathy.

It broke my heart to see lots of homes had been destroyed in the tragic hurricane. I can imagine how difficult this time must be for you and your family. But where there’s life there’s hope. Some organisations in my country are launching various campaigns to call on people to donate money in the hope that you can go through the difficulties as soon as possible.

Please pass my concerns on to your parents. If I can be of any help, don’t hesitate to let me know.

Yours sincerely,

Li Hua

（3）安慰情绪低落的朋友

假如你是李华，最近收到了你的美国朋友Jenny的来信。她在信中说，由于刚进入高中，还不能适应新的环境，不知道如何去结交新朋友，因而情绪低落。请根据以下内容给她回信。

1. 向Jenny表示问候和慰问；

2. 针对她的问题提出以下建议：

放学后邀请同学一起参加活动；  

你的同学遇到麻烦时，你去帮助他们；

你遇到困难时向同学求助。

注意：

1.词数100左右；

2.可适当增加细节，以使行文连贯；

3.信的开头和结尾已为你写好，不计入总词数。

Dear Jenny,

I am really sorry to hear that you feel bad after entering the high school.____________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________   Best wishes!

Yours,

Li Hua

Dear Jenny,

I am really sorry to hear that you feel bad after entering the high school. I’d like to talk about it with you.

In fact, in your senior high school, your classmates are also new and facing the same problem, so you don’t have to worry too much about it. There is also something that you can do to change this situation. First, try to invite some of your classmates to take part in some activities together after school. This will help you understand each other better than communicating with others. Then, help your classmates when they are in trouble and ask them to help you when you have difficulty.

I believe you will make many new friends and you will have a happy school life there.

Best wishes

Yours,

Li Hua

（4）

假定你是李华，你的美国朋友Tony因考试发挥失常，成绩不理想而情绪低落。请给他写封信表示安慰，要点如下：

　　1)表示难过和理解；    　    2)找出错误原因并及时改正；

　　3) 鼓励他重拾自信，实现梦想。

Dear Tony,

　　I'm sorry to hear that you didn't do well in your exam and that you are very worried about your study. I quiet understand how you feel now.

　　There is no doubt that we should keep a good state of mind. As we know, failure is the mother of success. We should spare no efforts to analyze the cause of failure, which could help us find out the mistakes we made and try to make up for the lack of knowledge and skills in those areas. Only in this way can we make progress in our study.

　　I hope that by the time this letter reaches you, you'll be feeling much better. Let's work hard together and turn our dream into reality.

　                 　Yours,

　                 　Li Hua

（5）

  假定你是李华，你的同班同学王刚家乡10月4日遭受台风“彩虹(Typhoon Mujigae)”袭击，洪水毁坏了家园，你作为班长给正在抗洪的他写一封慰问信，要点如下：

1. 对该同学表示关心；

2. 向其提供一些帮助，如捐助和补习；

3. 表达希望和对其重建家园的信心。

注意：1. 词数100左右；  2. 可以适当增加细节，以使行文连贯；

3. 开头语和结束语已为你写好。

Dear Wang Gang,

We’re so sorry to hear that a horrible and severe Typhoon Mujigae hit your hometown and your house is in ruins. We’re filled with deep sorrow. Please convey my sympathy to your family. Thinking about your present situation, we cannot wait a minute to make every bit of our effort to help you. I, as a monitor, on behalf of our class, express our most sincere pity and care for you. Besides, we make a donation of some money, expecting that it can help you go through the difficulty. We believe that with the help of so many kind people, a better house can be rebuilt. Finally, we’re all hoping you’ll be back soon and we will make up the lessons for you.

Best wishes!

 Yours sincerely,

                                                          Li Hua

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